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Some people think that the best way to motivate and encourage people is to pay according to their work. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work
In a modern, fast pace industry sector, few people think, the best method to captivate people to
work
 hard is by fixing the salary according to their productivity. I would not at all agree
on
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with
this
 viewpoint. Despite of considering the physical conditions of any people, consideration of pay scale aligned with what they produce and sell would be obsolete and
also
 it would not be ethically correct. Consider, if a person who is affected
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by
 a life threatening ailment like Jaundice or Malaria, they could not perform well in terms of their
work
 and eventually it will lead to stress for them. For an instance, I heard an employee who was affected with a serious disease had died due to the stress, just because he could not pay his son’s tuition fee since he didn’t get salary for two months from his company which is having the policy of salary aligned with what they
work
. Another reason for not to consider the pay according to their
work
 is, it will actually degrade any company’s growth, if
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a majority
the majority
 of the employees quit either temporarily by doing strike or permanently by resigning their job. It would in turn will affect the economy of the state and eventually the nation’s. According to one survey conducted in the year 2008 in the UK, about 65 percentage of people are quitting their job due to the policy of pay for
work
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the work
. To conclude, I would not agree that the pay must be considered according to what people
work
.
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