Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

For centuries a well-know way to educate children has been through punishments where they got
physicaly
in accord with physical laws
physically
smacked. By
examinating
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
examining
why parents used to implement
this
correction
tactics
Suggestion
tactic
,
this
essay will evidence how
this
practice, which I disagree
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
, is senseless and violent.
Firstly
, is important to understand the old-fashion parents mindset. In the
asian
a native or inhabitant of Asia
Asian
ocean
and
african
a native or inhabitant of Africa
African
cultures was perfectly normal to
discipline
kids by harm them in order to bring them on track in case their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
was out of control.
However
, adults were
implementeng
Suggestion
implemented
implementing
,
for instance
, unimaginable punish-tools like whiplashes or school rulers to execute the
discipline
act. A form of violence that eventually would end up in a
phisycal
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
and mental damage for those kids.
Secondly
, when time has passed and those children
has grown
Suggestion
have grown
had grown
older, they implemented a mirror-scale form of
discipline
to act upon their own children.
On the other hand
, governments are exceeding efforts in order to change
such
conduct by giving a different perspective to
responsables
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
and educators where parents can
discipline
them without
phisicly
in accord with physical laws
physically
harm them.
Thus
, ONU as well as the human rights watch, have reached out into an agreement where
children
Suggestion
children's
child
rights must be preserved avoiding
this
type of
conducts
Suggestion
conduct
conducting
. In
conslusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, I fully disagree of
this
form of
discpline
a branch of knowledge
discipline
against kids. Certainly, it is a violent way of
educate
Suggestion
educating
the future generations which it shall not lead to a
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
result. Nowadays,
this
acts
Suggestion
act
are
Suggestion
is
illegal around the world.
Lawforce
has the right to
romove
remove something concrete, as by lifting, pushing, or taking off, or remove something abstract
remove
children away from
thier
of them or themselves
their
parents if it is proven that they were attacking or violently act upon the children.

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