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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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People's opinions differ as to whether high income is in the country's interest or that the government should regulate the wages of the citizens. In my opinion, I believe that the authority should monitor people's take-home, so that the excesses could be used to improve other sectors of the nation. On the one hand, some think that earning a high income, encourages contentment.
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 to say, when people have enough cash, they are able to meet almost all their daily necessities,
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, they are not in quest of getting more money unduly.
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, society is more serene as there would be safety and security of lives and properties to a reasonable extent.
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 excess fund could be used by some of these individuals to brighten the hope of other citizens.
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, some high-income earners in the country build orphanages and
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 has helped to mop up destitute from the streets.
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, some opine that there should be checks on people's wages and I agree with
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 some would earn more and assist other less privileged but when there is equity, the nation would be a better place for all. Due to the control of funds, the government would be able to disburse money into other meaningful projects
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 as basic infrastructure, health, education etc.
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trageous and needs to be cut down so that the budget of the country can reduce and more can be done to improve the standard of living of the citizens. In conclusion, in spite of the various views on how much individuals should be paid, in my opinion, I believe that authority should regulate people's wages so that society will be a better place to live and the standard of living too will improve drastically.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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