It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

Both aspects have got their own positives and negatives. In my opinion, it would be a negative development as the
future
is always in the hands of the youth and they are considered as the
future
makers. No doubt, old people have got their importance and
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
existence is
also
important, but when we talk about the
future it
Accept comma addition
future, it
is always in the hands of the younger
generation
. Old people always laying a foundation for the
future
; their experience, guidance and supervision are always very
crucuial
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
, but they are not so productive due to their
age
and health factor as compared to the young
generation
. So, the existence of the youth over
the old
Suggestion
the older
older
generation
is considered when we talk about the
future
. A young man can work for 18 years, but an old person cannot be so much efficient.
For example
, in Japan a normal man of
age
24-35 works for 16 to 18 hours in a day, but a man whose
age
is 60 years or 70 years would not be so much
effective
Suggestion
more effective
due to health and
age
factors. So in my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would say, it would not be a positive development if there is a higher proportion of old people as compared to the younger
generation
in some countries.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • mentorship
  • strain
  • public healthcare systems
  • pension schemes
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • automation
  • consumption patterns
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • sustainable living
  • environmental conservation
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