You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: •correct the information in the article •explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information •suggest what the magazine should do about this situation
Dear Editor,
I hope you are doing great. I am writing
this
letter to tell you that I read a column in your magazine regarding the information about the urban areas of our country in which some knowledge about my town is wrong. I read the whole interesting article but the only thing which should be changed is related to the Flower City.
Firstly
, it is written that the locality was established 50 years ago by the authority of the Government but I wish to remind you that the city was originally established by the Sikh community around 300 years ago. Secondly
, you also
wrote that the history contains various pictures and paintings which you mention were made by Satinder Singh. However
, this
detail is not correct because that art was constructed by Sobha Singh who is the famous artist of Punjab.
Moreover
, I request you please change the article in your magazine and publish it with the right information so that the readers will know the accurate tradition of Flower City. I am very grateful to you.
Yours Faithfully,
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Task Achievement
The response partially addresses all parts of the task, mentioning the inaccurate information and the importance of correct data but lacking specific suggestions on what the magazine should do. Provide detailed solutions or actions for the magazine to take.
Task Achievement
The writing tone is slightly casual, using phrases like 'I hope you are doing great.' It is important to maintain a formal tone in a letter to the editor. Refrain from using conversational language or idiomatic expressions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of the letter can be improved by organizing the content into clear, separate paragraphs dedicated to each point. The introduction and conclusion need to be more formal and need to demonstrate clear intention and summarized closure respectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
A more distinctive greeting and closing are needed for formality. For example, use 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'Yours sincerely/faithfully,' followed by your full name for a more appropriate letter-writing format.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are somewhat organized with a single idea per paragraph, but there is room for clearer topic sentences and better transitions between paragraphs for improved readability and flow.