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Compared to the past, more younger adults take medications for degenerative diseases. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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According to the recent trends in the medical industry,
more young
Suggestion
younger
 adults take medication for degenerative diseases. The volume of medical cases in young
generation
 is comparatively higher than in the older
generation
. One main reason for increasing health issues is
lifestyle
Suggestion
a lifestyle
. A major portion of the diseases diagnosed nowadays is classified as the '
lifestyle
 disease'. These diseases, as the name indicates is caused by the
lifestyle
 of the new
generation
. Lack of exercise, unhealthy
food
 and drinking habits makes the situation worse. Lack of exercise contributes to a major portion of the
lifestyle
 diseases. In the yesteryears people ought to work hard physically to earn their
living whereas
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living, whereas
 the majority seek a white-collar job these days. They live a sedentary life. The older
generation
 used to work in the
soil cultivating
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soil, cultivating
 crops by ploughing, digging and carrying materials a long way. These physical works made them fit. Another important aspect of unhealthy habits is the
food
 we consume. People tend to choose unhealthy
food
 items as they are so handy and takes less effort to prepare. Consuming so much oily and processes
food
 in a huge quantity aggravates the
situation whereas
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situation, whereas
 having soft drinks in a large volume adds fuel to the situation. Summing up, in my opinion, the unhealthy habits and
lifestyle
 of the new
generation
 is the major factor that makes them live under medications at a very
younger
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young
 age.
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