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Competitiveness among high school children should be encouraged. Do you agree or disagree?

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Persuading high school pupils to engage in competitions has been a longstanding topic. I completely agree with
this
 statement, and
this
 essay will
further
 reveal how contests develop the mental mind of children as well as enabling them become responsible and fearless adults that venture into the world in future.
Firstly
, when students are inspired to partake in competitions, their mental minds grow spontaneously.
This
 is because, these pupils are exposed to extremely challenging conditions in the bid to succeed.
Hence
, propelling them to reason outside the box and exude ideas beyond their mental age.
For instance
, in a Nigerian High School, a group of young science undergraduates were involved in an international competition. These scholars were motivated to build a washing machine from the scratch despite not having done anything of that sort before.
Therefore
, exceeding their mental capacities and emerging as the best.
Secondly
, when contests are allowed between students, it encourages them to be responsible adults as well as being fearless.
This
 is because, contests come with challenges and obligations to surmount them. These problems, make young adults strong and courageous to face future obstacles.
For example
, a research done in a Nigerian secondary school in 1994, shows that 70% of young scholars that were inspired to compete in school now work in international companies and are engaged in great exploits globally. To conclude, it is clear that enabling undergraduates to participate in contests help with their mental development
also
 making them become vibrant adults in future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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