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Some people think that children who spend a lot of time reading children's story books are wasting their time which could be better used doing other more useful activities. To what extent do you agree?

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A section of society believes that time is lost if children squander it by reading storybook rather than doing other resourceful activities. In my opinion, I agree with
this
, children should
also
 get involved in different productive engagements which do more holistic development rather than just reading storybooks. Children are fascinated by various storybooks because of simplistic articulation of the message with an attractive storyline of their interest, which in return, entices them to read and eventually gather a good command
on
Suggestion
of
 vocabulary and comprehension. It
also
 helps them in improving their thought process,
moreover
, when they grow old, they recapitulate the same and explore on to a variety of books and expand their horizon of knowledge. Apart from that, it
aids
make an addition (to); join or combine or unite with others; increase the quality, quantity, size or scope of
adds
 them to gain wisdom in various domains to become a better human being and become more successful in future.
Nevertheless
, they
also
 need to study, spend time with family and engage in physical activities like playing with friends to gain social skills which are very crucial for their complete development.
Firstly
, family bonding is vital as they acquire values from their parents which is important.
In addition
 to that, different outdoor activities like playing any sport, which not only improvises their physical
health but
Accept comma addition
health, but
also
 enhances other key talents like negotiation, coordination, planning and communication abilities. To conclude, in my opinion, learning from reading storybooks is acceptable as long as it is performed in moderation while
also
 focusing on other vital aspects of wholesome grooming
that is
 needed for all-round development of a child.

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