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In the future, it seems more difficultto live on the Earth. Some people thinkmore money should be spent onresearching other planet to live, such asMars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe more financial resources should be allocated to universe study in order to discover a new habitable environment for humans due to the increasingly harsh living conditions on Earth. In my opinion,
this
 idea is completely justifiable. The population explosion is the
first
 urgent matter that urges results from space study. The world is facing the threat from the lack of land and accommodation for the ever-increasing rate of birth. Especially in densely populated cities like Hanoi, it is a common picture of people struggling to find an apartment.
This
 forces humans to resort to alternatives of changing living places to other planets.
Such
 an idea would not be actualized without enough money to employ scientists or establish research facilities
,
Accept space
,
emphasizing the demand for sponsorships. Another thing which justifies the budget spent on discovering a new suitable home for human beings is the depletion of natural resources,
such
 as fuel and water. Unfortunately, fossil fuels and water reservoir are being over-exploited for short-term benefits. In the long term, essential elements for sustaining life will dwindle away, and human life will be put at stake since there is no fuel to maintain production or transportation.
Therefore
, if there is even a fragile hope to discover a new environment, people should value the opportunity and invest money in researches on the space to ensure the survival of the human race. In conclusion, I strongly suppose that financial investments on discovering another planet as a new home to replace the Earth are reasonable.
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