Some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others , however, believe that boys and girls would benefit more from attending mixed schools.

The topic of co-education throws light at very complex issue that we are facing these days.It behoves that the subject is of immense importance.The subject is cerebration of two schools of thoughts.The
first
group
smoothly assert
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smoothly asserts
that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools.Well the other
group
excogitate that boys and girls would benefit more from attending mixed schools.In order to give any analysis
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
need to describe the issue in detail. Let's began with
first
group
which rightly vocalize
thatsingle
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that single
sex schools are more effective to teach boys and girls. These
type
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types
of
school
atmosphere encourage the students to concentrate their studies more and avoid attention seeking behaviour
also
.
In addition
to
this
, single sex schools give more opportunities to select their favourite subjects without any problems.
For example
, most of the girls choose
science subject
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science subjects
a science subject
for their higher studies. If they prefer to attend
girls
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girls'
school
, it can be easily affordable to the pupils who interested in specific subjects. In the same way, nowadays boys are very keen to study hotel management courses especially cookery classes.
On the other hand
, the
second
group
claim that mixed
school
helps the pupils to become a good
personality
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person
. From these
institutions both
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institutions, both
boys and girls work together from childhood onwards and they are able to learn each other, to gain various types of talents and personal skills from their surroundings itself which helps the both
gender
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genders
to become more mature and independent in their future life.
Furthermore
, they know how to communicate with each
otheralso
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other also
. To carry out the final conclusion after the close examination of
above discussion
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the above discussion
. Lead me to the
preplexing
lacking clarity of meaning; causing confusion or perplexity
perplexing
situation as it is very hard to give
final verdict
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a final verdict
the final verdict
.
Indeed reflection
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Indeed, reflection
of both groups
are quite clicking
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is quite clicking
.
However
, according to my objective analysis I believe that we have to encourage single sex
school
. But in the present situation student can have equal
partipation
the act of sharing in the activities of a group
participation
to study their interesting subjects from the schools, they joined.
Moreover it
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Moreover, it
is up to the decision of parents or children to prefer their
school
models.
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