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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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It is true that throughout the ages, people start
business
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a business
businesses
 to
work
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 themselves rather than to
work
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 for any other organisations.While
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,
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 trend seems to
brings
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bring
 a self-satisfaction on their job and more profitable earnings. Though it has few advantages,
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 essay describes some reasons of
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 phenomenon and the drawbacks of being an entrepreneur. Undoubtedly, the people those starting a business are not interested to perform under a manager.
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 is because they would not get any satisfaction from their job
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 as, no promotion, bullying from the higher authorities and so on.
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 pressing situation makes them to start an organisation which
might be lead
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might lead
 to own their new companies.
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the people who have been a self-employed have a few demerits.
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they have
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a great
 accountability to their
work
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,
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which sense that to make the company
profitable they
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profitable, they
 need to
work
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 hard and should please their customers.
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if there any lose in the organisation no one is responsible.
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results
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resulting
result
resultant
 rise in liability as well as
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effects
have an effect upon
affects
 the reputation of an individual who self-employed.
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Finally
, the one who working for salary
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have no tension because he would get monthly
payment even
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payment, even
 he took leave, as he has the company perks.While
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 would become opposite to
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a
business man
a person engaged in commercial or industrial business (especially an owner or executive)
businessman
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he has to
work
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 for 24/7 with
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a plenty
 of stress and struggles.
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no guarantee for the success
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of
in
 their passion able task.
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 shows that the one who starts their own
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 might be unsuccessful because of poor hard
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 and undeniable struggles on their new establishment. In conclusion, in the light of the above
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it is clear that if the
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
businesses
 would not become successful and
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 it would be a great debt to an entrepreneur.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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