Nowadays there is a trend that media focuses on problems and emergencies rather than positive developments. Some people think that it is harmful to individual and societies. To what extent do you agree ?

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It is true that in the current era print and electronic media mostly broadcasts news on environmental, social and economic and other issues rather than highlighting
progress
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the progress
that has been made. It is commonly believed by some people it
is detrimental to people and societies and I completely agree
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is detrimental to people and societies and I completely agreed
is detrimental to people and societies and I completely agree
with them. To commence, listening to negative news
have
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has
bad impact
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a bad impact
bad impacts
on
masses
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the masses
. It is a human nature that if people are presented with only dark and gloomy picture of their surroundings, they will ultimately feel frustrated and may suffer from depression and anxiety.
Therefore
, it is crucial that in order to promote
positive attitude
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positive attitudes
a positive attitude
, TV and radio ought to on-air reporting about good things rather than bad.
Otherwise
, citizens will
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
hope and
this
can raise statistics of depression patients at hospitals.
For instance
, a study found out that
as a result
of the most of the reporting comprising of negativity, 50% of the cases of anxiety increased in Pakistan in 2018.
Moreover
, if
media
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the media
only focuses
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only focus
on presenting issues about a society or country, it can severely damage the profile of these. Other nations will feel insecure and unsafe those places to visit about which negative reporting is being made.
Consequently
,
this
can make
bad image
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a bad image
of them resultantly, will affect
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
tourism industry. One best example of
this
is the
news which
Accept comma addition
news, which
were broadcasted
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was broadcast
was broadcasted
about the bomb blasts, thefts and other problems in Pakistan.
As a result
, it raised security concerns among foreigners and tourism reduce by 80% in
this
country. To conclude, I completely agree with
this
opinion that on-airing negative reporting not only create feelings of frustration among people, but it
also have
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also has
a negative effect on the economy and societies as a whole by distorting their reputation.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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