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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won describe the conditions on the day say how you felt about the match

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I was so sorry to hear about your accident! I hope you're feeling a lot better today and that it's not too boring in
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. The match on Saturday was disappointing. The score was 2 all, probably because you weren't there to score that extra goal! The awful thing was that we were winning until 10 minutes before the end
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 when suddenly they scored another goal. I was so shocked when I saw the ball hit the back of the net. I think the weather was to blame. It was a really wet day and the pitch was very muddy. By the end of the
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 you could hardly see the grass and we were sliding around in the mud. Everyone was exhausted. Let us know when you're going home and we'll arrange for someone to bring you to watch the
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 game. The rest of the team send their regards and we all wish you a speedy recovery. Best wishes, Charlie

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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