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More and more developing countries are expanding their tourist industries. Why is this? Is it a positive development?

In the modern world, some developing nations considering expanding
tourism
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 all over the
country
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.
Tourism
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 is known as an effective method to develop a nation by foreign income,
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 there is prominent proof available that the hospitalization industry positively affects the development of the countries.
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, some countries suffering from the lack of natural resources like oil, cola or advance industrialized technology, which is vital to the growth of the nation.
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, they have to depend on
tourism
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.
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, nations like Sri Lanka, Maldives, Hawai, which have a natural beauty that can't resist,
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 the magnificent beach around the island make attract tourists from all over the world. Those who have tourist attractions like the beach, nature, wildlife, naturally earn a significant amount of income of the
country
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. As an example,
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 covers 30% of the Sri Lankan capital budget.
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 of that, the government always promotes
tourism
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 in the
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 place. At the same time, there is numerous evidence, that
tourism
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 supports many individuals all over the
country
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 by creating more job opportunities and businesses. As an example, it is commonly seen, local street food corners that tourists are most likely to hang out which is created diversity of the nation.
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, the rapid development of the hotel feels can be identified as an upside. There are thousands of new job opportunities has been created due to
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 industry After all,
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 considers the importance of
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 for the developing
country
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 cannot be discarded
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 I believe that tourist attraction must be open to the world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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