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You missed an international flight due to a problem at the airport. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter: -describe what happened that caused you to miss your flight -explain how missing your flight impacted you -clearly state what you would like the airline to do

Dear Sir/Madam, I am Heta Arora and am writing
this
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 letter to inform you regarding
inconvenience
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the inconvenience
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 which I
have
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faced
on
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at
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 the boarding gate at the Ahmedabad international
airport
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,
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 yesterday. I have booked my ticket for
Ahmedabad
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the Ahmedabad
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 to Canada
flight
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. I went
at
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to
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 the
airport
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 and I passed the
clearners
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check-in
 of my bags and put my bags on the
bagbelt
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baggage belt
. After that, I reached
at
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the boarding gate to collect my boarding pass, as your airline has
rule
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a rule
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 that
hard
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a hard
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 copy of
boarding
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the boarding
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 pass
must be
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is
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needed
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required
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while
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 departing. So, I have requested one of the staff
member
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members
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 who is available at the desk
,
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 regarding my ticket printout. She did not deny me for the same. She tried to print out
but
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, but
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unfortunetly
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unfortunately
 printer was not working properly at that time. In order to
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this
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do this
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, I asked
to
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the crew member that please let me enter
on
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the
flight
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, as I have
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an eticket
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eticket
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e-ticket
but
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, but
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 they denied
as
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me as
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 per policy. On
this
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 account, I have missed my
flight
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but
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, but
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 my baggage was already locked in the
flight
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 and now it is at the
Canada
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Canadian
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airport
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. I would like to request to send my
belonings
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belongings
 back
at
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to
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 the
airport
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 and
also
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 please provide me my full refund because the
inconveniece occured
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inconvenience occurred
 from your end. I hope you will understand the situation and give your response as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Heta Arora

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph discusses one idea clearly. Some paragraphs mix ideas.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone for your request. Phrases like 'I would like to ask' sound nicer.
task achievement
Add more details about how missing the flight affected you personally.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly states the purpose of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Good use of headings and closing for your letter.
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