More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Animals are an integrating part of the ecosystem that we live in. Without the animals whole ecosystem and the food cycle will break and we will have famines and a mass extinction. But in the recent years more and more species are getting extinct at an alarming rate. While evolution is always a reason there are

manmade

not of natural origin; prepared or made artificially

man-made

reasons

also

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, namely two, mainly global warming and merciless killing.

First

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, let us look at global warming. We all know global warming is the most significant threat to mother nature as emission of various

green house

a building with glass walls and roof; for the cultivation and exhibition of plants under controlled conditions

greenhouse

gases are making

this

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planet more hotter and

unhabitable

fit for habitation

inhabitable

to many species of animals.

As a

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result many

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result, many

animals are dying and simply getting extinct

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Another

manmade

not of natural origin; prepared or made artificially

man-made

cause is merciless killing. Extinction due to

this

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process has always been around for years, as in

this

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way

dodo

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do do

to do

got

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get

extinct. But these days people with their

guns killing

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guns, killing

more animals

such

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whale

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whales

or tigers because of the rush and to sell these

animals

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animal

animal's

animals'

body

part

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parts

at a high price.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

173 words

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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Fully explain your ideas

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for example for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taugh to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Write a letter to the publisher in a newspaper, asking to advertise a meeting of people from different countries you are organizing. Explain where, when and why

Many students around the world are not choosing science subject at university? What are the reasons for this? What affects will this have on society?