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Parents should not pressure their children to choose particular profession. Young people should have the freedom to choose path they like. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Choosing the
right
 career is
one
 of the most difficult decision we
,
Accept space
,
as a teenager had to face. By the time we all get adult, we have to choose a path we want to take in order to be successful in future. But choosing the
right
 profession is always difficult, as
one
 doesn't always know the correct way they want to lead their lives. And that's where parents come into play. As we all know, parents are always worried our future. They are much older than us and they always want what they think are best for us
.
Accept space
.
 Since they are experienced in life more than their kids, that implies parents may give the
right
 direction to their child. And I think in many cases, our guardian may be correct about the best path we can take in life. But, Parents should
also
 know,
that is
 not the case all the time. As there is a proverb
one
 can't judge a fish by
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 ability to climb a tree.
Similarly
 guardians shouldn't force something on their sons and daughters. They should
also
 listen to their children and
then
 guide their
ways
Suggestion
way
. And
same thing
Suggestion
the same thing
 goes to the kids
also
, they should listen to their families
also
 while making any firm
desicion
the act of making up your mind about something
decision
. So my opinion is career is an important decision in anyone's life. And to select the
right
 profession
one
 must have a discussion with his family and parents and
then
 make a sound decision about their future.
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