adult do less exercise nowadays .some people think that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives though sporting events such as the olympics or the world cup . other think that there are better ways to encourage adults for exercise.discuss both view and in your opinion

Majority
Suggestion
The majority
of people
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
are leading a sedentary lifestyle. Due to the hectic lifestyle, adults do not indulge in physical activities. Few believe that in order to motivate people for exercising is through various sporting events like
Olympics
Suggestion
the Olympics
an Olympics
or World Cup, while few people opine
otherwise
.
This
essay will discuss both the views with examples.
Firstly
, people are leading an inactive life due to
plethora
Suggestion
the plethora
a plethora
of reasons like chaotic
work
schedule or personal commitments. Working professionals on average spend 9 hours a day
work
and due to the tight
work
schedule they have very little motivation to spend another hour in
gym
Suggestion
the gym
. To illustrate
further
, recent research by Hindustan Times states that 80% of working professionals have
erratic
Suggestion
erratic work schedules
an erratic work schedule
work
schedule and after
long day
Suggestion
a long day
nothing motivates them to
exercise
.
Furthermore
, research
also
states that sporting activities like Olympics or World cup are viewed as pure entertainment,
hence
there are very people who get inspiration
by
Suggestion
from
the athletes to
exercise
daily.
On the other hand
, I believe that there are better ways to motivate people for physical
exercise
like the government can motivate people by running various campaigns for healthy lifestyle and the benefits of it.
For example
, India Prime Minister Mr. Narendra Modi
has launched
Suggestion
launches
“Fit India Campaign” where he
personally encourages
Suggestion
has personally encouraged
the people of
country
Suggestion
the country
a country
to stay healthy and fit by doing regular
exercise
. In that campaign he shared his video of doing yoga on
daily basis
Suggestion
a daily basis
. Statistic shows that many people got motivated after seeing the prime minister video and have started doing any kind of physical activity. Alternatively, even
corporates
can motivate their employees to stay healthy by providing subside gymnasium memberships or provide
exercise
facilities in their offices.
This
will encourage people to
work
out on
regular basis
Suggestion
a regular basis
.
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