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Some people think that teenagers should follow what the old people say whereas some believe that it is good for teenage people to challenge what old people say. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

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Whether young adults should obey the orders of the aged people or not is a hotly debated topic that divides people. There are some individuals who argue that the children should question the guidance from
elders
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the elders
. In
this
 essay we will discuss on when should a teenager obey the elders and when one shouldn't, followed my viewpoint and conclusion. Can anyone deny that fact that a
persons
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person's
 age and their life experience is not directly related? No, it is irrefutable. Because of
this
 reason, it is advised that school children should respect and accept the things that
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
 or other aged people tell them to do. Not only, it can help them in doing things
easily but
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easily, but
also
 save precious time. When I was
kids my
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a kid, my
a kid my
kid my
 grandfather taught me abacus, it helped in doing my mathematics assignments with ease.
On the other hand
, when children near the
adultolesence
 they should be willing to question on the matters that they are asked to follow.
This
 is because, as they progress they will need to make some decision on their own and
everytime
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every time
 they can't have access to elderly guidance.
Although
, not sticking to advices might result in some mistakes, it could serve as an opportunity to learn. A
reasearch
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
 conducted by the Young Minds Associations found that young people who challenge the rules set by their
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
 are more
succesful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 as professionals when they join an organisation. To
conclude in
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conclude, in
 my opinion, it is better to stick to what old people say at the beginning of
tennage
being of the age 13 through 19
teenage
 and towards
the late
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the later
 end of teenage it is okay to find reason and debate on what one should be following.

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