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Today it is common practice for many business meeting and business training to take place online. Do the advantage of this new development outweigh the disadvantages.

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We are becoming more technology oriented with each day, one of the examples is our essay topic wherein we will talk about the advantages that have suppressed the minus points of the organisation related decisions taking place online.
Firstly
, let us talk about the advantages we have got by using
this
 online mode. Nowadays, we see that from school coachings, giving interviews and cracking deals with the clients everything happens online. The internet world era has given us a relief because now you don not have to wake up hours before to travel miles in order to attend a meeting. So, I feel it is a boon in today's time.
Secondly
, let us consider how the plus points of the human created world have covered up the disadvantages of the same. By using the technology wisely for trade, we definitely can make our lives less difficult, because the use of the internet for business meetings and business training is not only saving the time and energy, but giving us a better health
also
, because I there are countries in which pollution has increased up to a level that people find it difficult to breathe if they go out without surgical masks. It
also
 helps to decrease traffic and
as a result
 of its pollution too. So,
this
 practice definitely have got several huge advantages to sideline any of the weak points. Overall, I definitely do agree with the statement that online practice has a number of huge advantages that the disadvantages have got suppressed and I support
this
 practice too.
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