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Should young people follow older people's example or it is good for them to challenge older people's opinions and thoughts. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Though some people are of the opinion that
the newer
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the new
generation
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 should follow the older
generation
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's example, others argue that
the newer
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the new
generation
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 should be
skeptical
denying or questioning the tenets of especially a religion
sceptical
 of views held by the elderly. In my opinion, both points of views hold merit and specific situations in life dictate which view to follow. Older people usually have wisdom which comes after decades of practical experience.
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 wisdom is particularly useful in situations which are recurring in nature. As an evidence for
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, the following excerpt "Throughout history, the only pattern we have seen is that
instances
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instance
 repeat themselves" from the book of authors Will and Ariel Durant is famously quoted. Examples
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 recurring nature of history in the present day are marriage or career advice which can be as relevant for us today as they were for our elders, a
generation
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 ago. Some events or ideas are
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generation
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generating
 specific which may not repeat themselves in similar forms. Thinking of the elderly becomes dated when applied to these current problems.
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, many older people have very strong views on
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the use
 of recreational drugs or homosexuality.
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 as the world modernized, these things have become largely acceptable to the younger citizens.
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, it may be wise to be
skeptical
denying or questioning the tenets of especially a religion
sceptical
 of opinions of
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older
 people in situations which evolve over time. In conclusion, in my opinion the youth should use its judgement when it decides to follow elderly citizens. As a template, young people may see if the specific situation is repetitive in nature or not.

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