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Governments should spend money on the railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Constructing better infrastructure for transportation is one of the major responsibilities of every government. Some people argue that a large portion of the budget should be allocated
to
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for
 the expansion of railways
instead
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 of roads. I agree with
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 notion to a larger extent, and the following paragraphs stand for my justification. On the one hand, it is
wisely
to a great degree
widely
 believed that trains are beneficial in terms of environmental, economic, and safety issues. Nowadays, thanks to the rapid growth of science and technology, trains that used to burn fossil fuels,
such
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 as coil, have become obsolete, and are replaced by
electrical
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electric
 ones. These new trains are capable of transferring passengers and commodities without exerting any detrimental effect on the environment.
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, thanks to these environmentally-friendly transport systems, the journeys have become faster, if not more convenient. Because of using electricity, there is no need for the combustion of the fuel;
therefore
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, the train moves more smoothly. On top of these factors, the
railway
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 system is more reliable in comparison with roads, because of regular maintenance of them, as well as the controlled speed of the trains.
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, there are a few constraints in implementing
railway
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, particularly in remote areas. Despite a large number of the benefits of trains, they are not applicable in all areas. In some regions, it is considerably expensive, if not impossible, to build a
railway
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 to connect remote places,
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 as regions located near the mountains.
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, the necessity for road construction is unlikely to be eliminated. To wrap up, the
railway
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 system is more advantageous considering its mitigated implications to nature, as well as its reliability.
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, we will not reach remote areas unless we benefit from high-quality roads, as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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