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Some people think that for individuals, planning for the future is a waste of time. It is more important for individuals to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is an opinion that it is more useful to
plan
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 for current situations rather than making
future
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 plans.
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, I disagree with
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 viewpoint because it could reduce stress and
also
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 help to prevent having challenges if
one
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 plans ahead of
time
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. Even though a
plan
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 made ahead of
time
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 might not be useful at the
time
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 of
excution
putting a condemned person to death
execution
, it helps
one
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 take necessary precautions which could be beneficial. The reason is that emergency demands could lead to psychological stress to accomplish a particular
request even
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request, even
 if the resources are readily available with
few phone calls
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a few phone calls
. To illustrate, people know that in
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future their children
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the future their children
 would enter college and plans ahead for it by having savings in
bank
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the bank
a bank
, it could help reduce a lot tension when the
time
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 comes.
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, the tuition fees could be paid at ease without having to apply for loan for neither the bank nor a friend. Clearly, planning helps
alot
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a lot
. Another reason
foor
appropriate to; intended for
for
 making
future
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 plans is that it helps avoid embarrassment.
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, when people
plan
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, it makes them to avoid hassles that could affect
one
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 achievements in life and it
also
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 portrays a positive personality
for
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of
 the individual. In
job interview
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a job interview
the job interview
job interviews
,
for example
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, if
one
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 prepares by doing research about the company and carry all
document
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documents
 which might be needed, it indicates that the candidate is not only determined, but
also
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cordinated
being dexterous in the use of more than one set of muscle movements
coordinated
coordinate
 in his affairs.
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, would create a good impression of him which could make him a possible candidate for that position compared to someone who did not prepare properly. Clearly, it is important to
plan
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 ahead of
time
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. In conclusion,
although
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 some
future
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 plans might not be used at the
time
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 of execution, the
time
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 and energy saved as well as its profound benefits to the people if
implementing
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implemented
 the plans is required, makes me believe that it is useful to
plan
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 in advance.
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