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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A
university
 plays a big role in the education system of any country. Both males and females have an opportunity to study any
subject
 at a
university
. The
University
 accepts students, including males and females in every
subject
. Indeed, universities should accept equal numbers of male and female in every
subject
.
This
 process helps to maintain gender equality.
Therefore
, there is less possibility of a particular gender dominating class. Equal numbers of male and female students in a
university
also
 reflect the equality of society.
This
 process is
also
 an aspect of woman empowerment.
For example
, in India Physical Education is a male dominating
subject
, that's why each year it produces huge numbers of male Physical Education teachers than females. The concept of equal numbers of males and females is vague and an example of discrimination. A
university
 is not a study place of male and female students it must be a place for transgender as well.
This
 concept will outlaw merit-based intake in the future. It is quite like
a
Suggestion
an
 unofficial reservation. A
university
 must maintain gender equality. But that does not mean that merit will be discarded. The
University
 should accept the same numbers of male and female students but not for every
subject
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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