The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
The table demonstrates total numeric statistics
while
charts represent the satisfaction proportions of the Linking Words
visitors
who came to see Ashdown Use synonyms
museum
, in the Use synonyms
year
before and after its renovation.
In tabular data, the number of Use synonyms
visitors
increased from 74,000 in the former Use synonyms
year
to 92,000 in the lateral Use synonyms
year
. Use synonyms
While
in Linking Words
charts
, the number of Correct article usage
the charts
visitors
who are very satisfied Use synonyms
from
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with
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museum
went significantly high from 15 to 35 in the Correct article usage
the museum
year
after its redecorated. A similar raising trend of Use synonyms
visitors
, from 30 to 40, is recorded for those who are satisfied with their visit to Use synonyms
Use synonyms
museum
. In contrary, for dissatisfied people and very satisfied people, Add an article
the museum
a museum
this
figure decelerate sharply from 40 to 15 and from 10 to 5 in the Linking Words
afterward
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afterwards
year
respectively. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the number of Linking Words
visitors
who give Use synonyms
no
response regarding their visit to Ashdown Correct your spelling
not
museum
remains constant in Use synonyms
the
both years.
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apply
Thus
, the Linking Words
visitors
feel more satisfied after the Use synonyms
museum
was renovated as is shown by the output of the Survey.Use synonyms
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