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Some people believe that there will be a reduction in air travel fare in the future. Do you think it is positive or negative development?

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In the current scenario, travelling across the country has been changed drastically as compared to the past. Eventually, it has been often claimed that most individuals think there will be a depletion in the flight tariff in the forthcoming era. I completely agree that the decrease in air fares is a positive development because people come closer, hike in the economy, mixing of culture and frequent travels could be possible. To commence with, the decrease in transport prices will narrow the boundary across the different land and people would able to meet their loved ones.
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, they can share their feelings as well as cherish the old memories and connect with new friends, which won't be possible if the fare haven't decline.
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, whenever countries connect with each other their economy will arouse so that demand for import and export will not only cultivate country's GDP (Gross Domestic Product) but individuals can
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 starve with the betterment of the infrastructure. To epitomized, a survey conducted by Divya Baskar reveals that 82% hike in economy growth occurs when one kingdom connect with others international markets. Moving
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, culture becomes similar in the most countries around the globe since three years back.
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, before it was difficult to communicate between two nations but now people speak with ease because of the same language trend all over the world.
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, decrease in air fares will enhance the scope of expanding business beyond a state.
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, a businessman may frequently plan their trip as it will save the cost;
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 collaboration with new companies new companies in the aborad will be possible. To illustrate, an article written by Mr. Mukesh Ambani discloses that business could only be expanded if the government subsidize the cost of travelling to spendable amount. For now he is the top ten richest people because of support from higher authorities for reducing the cost of moving price. In conclusion, mentioned above thought
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 as not only connecting family members, an increase in the financial system, but
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 merging two nations moral values and often journeys for business purpose will tend towards positive development because of reducing the flight prices.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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