Some people argue that governments should spend more money on developing bullet and metro rail facilities, while others support the idea of spending money on upgrading current public transport system. This essay analyses these viewpoints in the following paragraphs and concludes with my opinion.

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In present world railway system and
road
system both
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system, both
are most important
transport
methods.Some believe that countries
should spent
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should spend
more
money
on building new railways. Others argue that
government
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the government
should spent
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should spend
more
money
on development of
road
transport
methods. In
this
essay I will discuss both
side
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sides
relevant to
this
topic
To begin
with, trains are able to carry more passengers at the same
time
.
As a result
of
this
, the amount of carbon dioxide release
in to
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into
air
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the air
will decrease.
Moreover
, trains are much faster and
cheap
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cheaper
to travel. By travelling using the trains, travellers avoid the traffic jams and
this
help
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helps
them to earn their
time
and work on
time
. For an instance, in my country Sri Lanka
,,
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,
it takes 1.30 hours for my
mom
to go to work if she
use
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uses
the
road
transport but
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transport, but
by train it takes only 45 minutes.
On the other hand
, sometimes trains being delayed and cancelled.
As a result
of
this
plural of "this"
these
those
passengers become inconvenient because they have to wait
long
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a long time
time
for the
next
train. For an example, travellers who using public
transport
such
as buses
are not facing to
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are not facing
these types of situation because there are various options in
road
transportation.
In addition
, it costs
enormous amount
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an enormous amount
to construct new railroads than public
transport
.
Also
, nowadays most of travellers use their own vehicles because of
this
there is no point of
spend
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spending
huge amount of
money
on building new railroads. In conclusion, some argue that
government
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the government
should spent
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should spend
more
money
on constructing new railroad than roads because, trains are able to carry more passengers and they are more faster.
However
, opponents believe that countries
should spent
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should spend
more
money
on
maintaince
activity involved in maintaining something in good working order
maintenance
and development of existing roads because passengers have to wait
long
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a long time
time
if the trains cancelled and building new railways costs lots of
money
.
In contrast
, I think countries should pay more attention on constructing railroads because of huge benefits and convenience of using trains.
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