The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

#energy #electricity

The diagram illustrates the production of

electricity

using geothermal energy in a specially designed geothermal power plant. As seen from the figure, the cold

water

is pumped down, about 4.5 km, in the earth towards

injection

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the injection

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well. In the

second

step,

this

water

is passed through hot rocks which have very high

temperature

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temperatures

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and pressure in the geothermal zone. After passing through it, the extremely hot

water

is moved towards the production well.

This

water

then

pumped up again to the surface of

earth

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the earth

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. The hot

water

then

passed through

condenser

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a condenser

the condenser

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where steam is produced. In the

last

step, the steam is used to run a turbine and the power generated by turbines is utilized to start

generator

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a generator

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which

finally

produce

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produces

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electricity

This

energy is

then

supplied to

electricity

towers for

further

usage.

To sum up

although

the process of

electricity

generation using geothermal energy involves fewer steps,

but

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apply

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it is

underground

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an underground

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mechanism carried out at a very high temperature and pressure.

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Topic Vocabulary:

geothermal energy
generate electricity
diagram
volcano
magma reservoirs
deep underground
heat
steam
geothermal plant
turbine
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underground reservoirs
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power grid
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