The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

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The diagram illustrates the production of

electricity

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using geothermal energy in a specially designed geothermal power plant. As seen from the figure, the cold

water

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is pumped down, about 4.5 km, in the earth towards

injection

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the injection

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well. In the

second

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step,

this

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water

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is passed through hot rocks which have very high

temperature

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temperatures

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and pressure in the geothermal zone. After passing through it, the extremely hot

water

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is moved towards the production well.

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water

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then

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pumped up again to the surface of

earth

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the earth

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. The hot

water

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then

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passed through

condenser

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a condenser

the condenser

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where steam is produced. In the

last

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step, the steam is used to run a turbine and the power generated by turbines is utilized to start

generator

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a generator

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which

finally

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produce

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produces

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electricity

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This

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energy is

then

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supplied to

electricity

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towers for

further

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usage.

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although

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the process of

electricity

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generation using geothermal energy involves fewer steps,

but

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it is

underground

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an underground

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mechanism carried out at a very high temperature and pressure.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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164 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

geothermal energy
generate electricity
diagram
volcano
magma reservoirs
deep underground
heat
steam
geothermal plant
turbine
condensed
pumped back
underground reservoirs
transmitted
power grid
distribution
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renewable
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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

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