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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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It is argued that our lives were more fulfilling when
technology
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the technology
 was less complex.
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 essay disagrees with
this
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 statement and believes that computers and the
internet
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 have made life much better because smartphones save us time and the
internet
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 has improved education. New phones,
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 as the iPhone,
have made
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make
 our daily lives much less laborious and have given us more free time. Jobs that required lots of energy and time can now be done at the touch of a button.
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, if we wanted to communicate with one another in the past, we had to write a letter, take it to the post office, and
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 wait for it to be delivered, whereas these days we can simply tap the email icon on our touch screen and send a message to whomever we want to communicate with in seconds. The
internet
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 has
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 enriched our lives by providing us with more information than we could ever dream of, and
this
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 has made us more independent and effective learners. In the past, students had to rely on a teacher and physical books for their education, and these were often either unavailable or in a format that most people did not want, but now we can pick and choose what we want to learn.
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, there are now thousands of free online courses available on YouTube that anyone can watch and learn from anywhere in the world. In conclusion,
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 essay suggests that life has been greatly improved by technological advancements, particularly labour-saving phones and the learning opportunities provided by the
internet
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.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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