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Todays children are living under more pressure from the society than the children in the past. To what extent do you agree or diagree give your opinion.

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It is an incontrovertible fact that in
this
 technical era, people are enjoying more comfortable life.
However
 the
society
 have
pressure
 on the offsprings nowadays as compared to older time children. I vehemently agree with
this
 statement and rendered my
view points
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoints
 in the upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, there are some reasons why the children are living under
pressure
 from the
society
. The
first
 and foremost is that competitive era, nowadays young one are
compete
Suggestion
competing
 with children from all over
world
Suggestion
the world
. They
are not gain
Suggestion
are not gaining
do not gain
don't gain
have not gained
 good marks in study and they are feeling
pressure
 because of it.
Secondly in
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Secondly, in
 the
society
 they are seeing more projects rather than past times.
For example
, if someone have
iPhone
Suggestion
an iPhone
 or expensive watches the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 children want to buy it. But they cannot afford it and they are feeling
pressure
 to acquire
this items
Suggestion
this item
these items
. To continue with my
view points
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoints
, they
also
 have a
pressure
 related to
culture
 because most children are adopting the Western or Global
culture
. But, the
society
 is not accepted and the always tell them for traditional
culture
. They are in a dilemma because of it and feel
stress which
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stress, which
 is not in
earlier generation
Suggestion
earlier generations
an earlier generation
. In my opinion the earlier children has not
stress
 related to academic, employment and
culture
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culture, although
although
 they have no too much technical gadgets. But the young one has more
stress
 because of advancement in recent children. In conclusion, the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 are facing more
stress
 because of more
desires but
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desires, but
 if they are living in their
limits
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limits, then
then
 definitely they can enjoy the peaceful and
stress
 free life.
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