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Some people say that young people learn useful skills by playing electronic and computer games. Others say that young people who play electronic and computer games are wasting their time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Electronic and computer games are a rage, especially among young people. Some people argue that playing
such
 games is beneficial for youngsters in learning useful skills, while others think it is leads to wastage of time. In
this
 write up, I will discuss both views and opine why I feel one should give these games a chance. The gaming universe has evolved a lot in past 15-20 years. There is an array of different games on various platforms to choose from. Nowadays, a lot of attention is paid to their storylines, characters, music and gameplay. Perhaps gaming experience now is as involved as cinema.
Therefore
, it can not only stimulate the imagination of a teenage mind, but
also
 acts as a stress buster. Kids easily handle a plethora of apps on mobiles or computers because they have become tech savvy thanks to the exposure to gaming. The industry
also
 provides plenty of employment opportunities to players, developers, technicians among others. With the emergence of technologies like Virtual Reality the numbers are only going to go up so there is an added incentive for gamers. That being said, there is a flip side of
this
 discussion, which involves mainly around the negative effects of excessive gaming and malpractices in the gaming industry. It is observed that social skills are lacking among children who are on mobiles or computers all the time. Many have a weak eye sight due to prolonged exposure to bright screens. Many researchers have propounded that violent games have a debilitating effect on a child's mind. The kids have
also
 been known to lose focus
in
Suggestion
on
 studies and become lazy. The depiction of female characters in some of the games is very questionable and
hence
 it affects a perception of an impressionable tender mind. In my opinion, parents have to keep a close watch on the kind of content their kids are consuming and allow them to enjoy games for a limited time. To conclude, as long as we can control it from becoming an addiction, gaming is alright.
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