Studies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can get a job when leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?

Several researches have shown that criminals do not have
high level
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a high level
high levels
of
education
.
Thus
, it
is believe
Suggestion
is believed
that providing
education
for those who are in prison is the best option to obtain crime reduction because they can find a job after being released. I personally do think
this
solution could only address the problem to some extents. On the one hand,
education
for prisoner brings a wide range of positive impact on their intellectual. Providing moral and social
education
could help criminals to understand in depth the value of behaving properly.
Furthermore
, specific
education
might help them control their tempers and work well with other people.
For example
,
policer
the force of policemen and officers
police
can teach prisoner with different facilitation methods to trigger their negative ideas and
then
help them to calm down and change the energy into something would not result in any damages. After re-integrating the
society
, community have a certain understanding of how
imprisoners
have improved during prisoning time and
therefore
those of people can get a job to work as normal.
On the other hand
, receiving an
education
does not mean they are accepted by
society
. Vocational
education
in prison might prepare them skills to make ends meet and they might be able to get a job.
However
, social stigma
is still existed
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still exists
for those who was imprisoned. The stigma and self-stigma, which cannot be controlled by special
education
for criminals, would lead to re-commit
to
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of
crime when they are in the real world receiving negative comments. In conclusion, educating prisoners is a great preparation for people to reintegrate into the
society but
Accept comma addition
society, but
might not be the best way because other solutions
such
as sensitizing
society
need to be taken into account.

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