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Some people think that having people from different nationalities and cultural backgrounds living together in the same country makes the country develop faster . Do you agree

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There is a believe that bringing together people from different countries and cultural backgrounds can accelerate the advancement of a country. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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 idea considering a general setting, having two or more people coming together with different views and skills will help achieve a better result, I will
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 support my view with some points.
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, taking the case of Nigeria in 1960, the nation was
initially
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 in the dark in education and
development
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, but the presence of the British and other foreign countries helped us to develop fast
er especially in
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faster, especially
trade exchange, there are still places in Africa with no access to formal education and
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 is a priority for national growth to occur, having multinationals from deve
loped nat
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developing
ions will help the nation to grow.
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, most schools in Nigeria
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ple were bui
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lt by foreigners, the university of ibad
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a large Yoruba city in southwestern Nigeria; site of a university
Ibadan
dest institution in Nigeria was built by the British government.
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, cultural exchange helps in the
development
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 of a country. It limits the barriers of communication between countries which can help
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 country to get support from more developed countries.
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, Commonwealth African nations like Ghana saw a great spike in
development
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 and still benefitting immensely from the British government because of the mutual understanding existing between the countries, another example is the increasing investment of Chinese government in Nigeria due to
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 interaction. In conclusion, the benefits African countries have derived from the foreign countries are all obvious for all to see,
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, having people from different cultural background will
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 accelerate
development
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 and should be encouraged.
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