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Writing Samples
Band 6

You have recently returned from an afternoon at your public library, and noticed various negative aspects that could be improved upon. Write a letter to the manager of the public library. In your letter: Describe the poor experience you had Include ideas for what the library should change Explain why you feel the library needs alteration Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with the facilities provided in the local public
library
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. I visited the
library
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 yesterday and I was saddened to witness a few
discripencies
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discrepancies
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Firstly
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,
lighting
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the lighting
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 in the reading area is very poor and I barely could read the text written
on
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 the book.
Secondly
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, seating is very uncomfortable, because
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library
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the library
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have
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has
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 been using
old fashioned
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old-fashioned
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 wooden chairs without cushioning.
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, there were no latest magazines in the current affairs section of the facility and those which were present are not up to date. I would like to propose a few changes
in
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 the
library
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.
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kindly replace the old and malfunctioning lights with the new LED lamps, which are in use nowadays.
Second,
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you could
change
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replace
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 old chairs with
the
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apply
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modern chairs with cushions on them.
Third,
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kindly place
order
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an order
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 for
latest
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the latest
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 versions of the magazines.
This
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 reading facility is very popular among the locals of nearby areas and especially among youngsters, who are preparing for their exams.
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, I urge you to look into the matter. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea or point. You can combine similar points under one coherent paragraph.
coherence cohesion
To achieve a more organized flow, consider using linking words to connect your ideas.
task achievement
The letter provides a complete response, addressing all parts of the task by describing experiences, suggestions, and reasons for changes.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for the intended audience.
coherence cohesion
The letter is appropriately structured with a clear greeting and closing.
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