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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? Write at least 250 words.

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As the general trend is observed people choose big salary over job satisfaction,
on the contrary
 In my opinion people who are happy for who or what they
work
 for produce an output greater than those who do
work
 that they are not satisfied with.
Firstly I
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Firstly, I
 would like to say that no job is stress free
,
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,
 usually there is
certain amount
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a certain amount
 of stress associated with every profession out there and it depends on the people if they can put up with it. One of the reasons that people choose job satisfaction over high paying salary might be because they
dont
do not
don't
 want to
work
 under someone and be the bosses of their own,
this
 is how a lot of people put up individual business after they have crossed
age
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the age
 of taking risks and
that is
 exactly how Flipkart an Indian e-commerce website was set up by 2 guys who were fed up with their "nine to five" jobs.
Furthermore as i have
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Furthermore, as I have
Furthermore as I have
 stated earlier being happy with the output of the
work
 is an important factor for people refusing jobs with a higher pay. As a lot of NGO's
go
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goes
 a lot of their full
time
 participants have quit their full
time
 jobs and have begun contributing to the society in one way or the other. There are more than 2000 full
time
 intrepid workers from
isha
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Isha
 foundation who have devoted their
time
 and energy for the good of people. Their
work
 in
replantation
 of over 20 million trees has been revolutionary and has been actually helpful to public. So we can say that stress and the output of the
work
 play an important role in someone choosing what or who they want to
work
 for rather than just
gong
the act of departing
going
 after a high salary.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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