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Some parents think its good to have their children mobile phones, others disagree? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#parents #children #phones
The
inavetable
incapable of being avoided or prevented
inevitable
 rise of technologies and
affordability schs
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affordability, schools
affordability schools
affordability searches
affordability six
 as smartphone
make
engage in
do
 is use spread through people and family member, even children nowadays have type of mobile phone, which is
unfaverabel
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 for others. In my opinion, I think children ought not have
smarphone
 in the early age. On the one hand, the main reason for those who give children phone is that they feel safe when they keep
toche
make physical contact with, come in contact with
touch
to with their kids
Suggestion
with their kids
.
For example
, in the case of emergency they can reach
to
Suggestion
for
 them after just a call.
Also
, most of
families parents
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families, parents
 are working both parents so, they spend most of their time away from their kids,
therefore
, they prefer to give their kids a communication device
such
 as
mobile phone
Suggestion
mobile phones
a mobile phone
.
On the other hand
, I would agree with those who choose to do not offer
smarphone
 for younger children for two reasons mainly.
Firstly
, gaining these devices early may affect
children
Suggestion
children's
child
child's
 health, to illustrate, these electronic
diveses
an inclination or desire; used in the plural in the phrase 'left to your own devices'
devices
devises
 emission
screan
not agitated; without losing self-possession
serene
screen
 light which may have a negative effort
on
Suggestion
in
 their eyes, and the more hours of uses the more
unfoverable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
consequnces
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequences
. Another argument is that
such
gudget
a sum of money allocated for a particular purpose
budget
 leads to
addication
being abnormally tolerant to and dependent on something that is psychologically or physically habit-forming (especially alcohol or narcotic drugs)
addiction
education
 and it
consider
Suggestion
considers
 as an anti-social device, for instant, if children spend long time in front of their smartphone, they will affect their social community and losing some of communicating skills
as a result
 the will be unable to make real
friendship
Suggestion
friends
. To
conclued
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
, after a careful analysis of the two points, I believe that children should not have phones as it will
afect
have an effect upon
affect
 their health and social
commuincation
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
communications
, and they will have only virtual friends
instead
 of real ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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