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in the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Show advantages and disadvantages of this.

Society has undergone many changes , and that includes how
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 communicate and
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. Nowadays, technology has made it easier to communicate ,
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 and shop online . Today, communication in the virtual world is more common than in the real world .
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
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 topic . On the one hand , there are many advantages to doing everything online . First , the internet is very convenient.
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 of communicating face-to-face, everyone can chat online.
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 , working online by computer will let
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 save time . Second , using the internet will make
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's lives flexible .
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 or study any time without strict schedules .
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, they will not have a specific time to adhere to.
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, everybody can have opportunities.
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 can
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 for companies in other countries .
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, they can take online courses and speak to
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 from different countries .
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,
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 , there are several disadvantages to doing everything online . First , that can cause health problems .
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 , when somebody sits all day, that can cause headaches .
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 , they will have less physical activity . Second , their communication skills will be poor . When they communicate online, it will be difficult for them to talk with
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 face-to-face.
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, their social skills will be weak .
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,
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's
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 will be imbalanced . Sometimes , they have
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 at home , and they
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 do some tasks online . Some
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 can not balance their
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 and their personal life . In conclusion, there are a number of excellent advantages of communicating and doing everything through technology.
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, there are some drawbacks , and in some cases, the best option is in person.

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content
Give more clear and real examples for each idea to back up your point.
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Try not to repeat words. Use small changes and connect ideas with simple links like also, but, for example, however.
conclusion
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Put ideas in clear blocks: intro, one part on good sides, one part on bad sides, then a short finish.
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The essay shows a clear plan and topic.
content
The view is balanced, with both sides.
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The essay has a simple, easy flow across sections.
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