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show the changes of the number of visitors in three main major airports in New York city from 1995 to 2000

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The graph gives information about how many people visited New York city in three airports from 1995 to 2000 Overall
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we can see that a fluctuate t
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in John F.Kennedy airport while 2 others saw an upward trend
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between 1995 and 2000
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Firstly, in
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the beginning period there were 25 million of visitors in John F.Kennedy airport
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number
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nreased
made greater in size or amount or degree
increased
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a year
and reached a peak in 1997 n
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(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
million
millions
of passengers
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After that
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it decreased d
ramarically
in a very impressive manner
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only over 30 million of visitors
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In 1999 at the end of p
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the period
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it went up to 45 m
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million
travellers
On the other hand
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LaGuardia began at 35 million in 1995
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It rose r
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remarkable
year by year and in 200
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this
number
 nearly double with the b
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big inning
number
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Newark airport was nearly the same as LaGuardia
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it increased s
igniicantly
in a statistically significant way
significantly
and reached over 40 millions of visitors in 1998
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After that
this
number
 had no change to the end of period
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