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show the changes of the village park's map 10 years ago and now

#show #changes #village #park #years
The map d
ecrive
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describes
describe
the r
ansfromation
of a village park from 10 years ago to now Overall, it can clearly be seen that the woods d
isapear
get lost, as without warning or explanation
disappear
disappeared
,
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,
there are 2 new areas. In the
last
 ten years, there was a car park which can contain 20 cars. In t
h
definite article
the
n
otyh
in a northern direction
north
of the map, there were 2 tennis courts and
next
 to the tennis c
outr
an assembly (including one or more judges) to conduct judicial business
court
was a
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an
area
 where c
hilren
a young person of either sex
children
can play i
nside
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in
it
.
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.
A large football pitch took place in m
iddle
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the middle
.
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.
In the n
orth east
the compass point midway between north and east; at 45 degrees
northeast
,
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,
there were a pond and woods In the present
,
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,
as we can see
,
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,
There are so many c
hange
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changes
.
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.
t
he
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The
car park has expanded which can contain 50 cars j
nstead
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
of 20 cars in the
last
 10 years. The tennis c
out
an assembly (including one or more judges) to conduct judicial business
court
Court
has extended
.
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.
The children p
lat
participate in games or sport
play
plant
plot
area
 has improved i
nto
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in
2different areas
,
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,
there are c
hildren
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children's
p
lat
participate in games or sport
play
area
 ad children s
olf
yielding readily to pressure or weight
soft
safe
play
area
. The football pitch has reduced
,
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,
next
 to it
,
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,
there is a toilet in the n
orth east
the compass point midway between north and east; at 45 degrees
northeast
,
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,
people built a picnic
area
.
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.
The pond h
as replaced
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has, replaced
by b
oating
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boat
a
ke
a body of (usually fresh) water surrounded by land
lake
and the woods has c
utted
separate with or as if with an instrument
cut
quieted
down and it a
hnged
forming or set at an angle
angled
into the café
.
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.
Around the map there is a cycle path
.
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.
Where people can drive their bycicle on
this
 road
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