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show the changes of the village park's map 10 years ago and now

#show #changes #village #park #years
The map
illustrate
Suggestion
illustrates
 how the village
park
 had transformed from 100 ago and now Overall, it can be seen that
,
Accept space
,
 there are many changes happened between now and the past
.
Accept space
.
Besides
 that
,
Accept space
,
 there has some project be
exoanded
increased in extent or size or bulk or scope
expanded
extended
 In 10 years ago
,
Accept space
,
 there had two tennis
court but
Suggestion
court, but
courts but
courts courts but
 now
,
Accept space
,
 we build more to become 4 tennis
cout
an assembly (including one or more judges) to conduct judicial business
courts
court
 the car
park
 is expanded from 20 cars to 50 cars
.
Accept space
.
 In the North – East of the
ma
Suggestion
MA
map
main
,
Accept space
,
there divided
Suggestion
they've divided
they're divided
they divide
 children area from
children
Suggestion
children's
 soft play area the football pitch becomes smaller after 10 years The toilet is
constrcted
make by combining materials and parts
constructed
constricted
contracted
 in the East of the village
park
.
Accept space
.
 They build the cycle
parh
a course of conduct
path
 around the
park
. In the East – South of the map , the pond which beside the woods has been replaced by a boating lake and the wood had changed into the case
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