A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the
modern fast
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modern, fast
evolving and materialistic
society
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there seems to be great changes
to
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in
our values and how we see other individuals. There seems to be a
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trend, whereas
a person’s worth is based upon their social status and material possessions
instead
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of personal values,
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as honour, generosity and loyalty.
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essay will discuss how the modern
society
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and technology has affected how we
view
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other people’s worth. In the earlier
societies people
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societies, people
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
more dependent on their reputation to survive and have success. They needed to gain trust from other people to be able to make agreements and honour to keep them. If they were kind to others,
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others could return the favour.
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, in the modern
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these values are no longer as necessary. There are law systems and governments that
binds
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bind
contracts legally between different parts and makes the word and trust of others not as important as it was earlier.
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, has
this
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change in
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affected how we
view
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others in a way were these former values are not that important anymore.
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, has the advancements in technology opened new platforms where we communicate and
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our friends, colleagues and family.
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has increased our attention towards social media, which has resulted in people judging each other based on their profiles.
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,
this
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often leads to people trying to appear as wealthy and successful as possible on social media to increase their worth in
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. In my experience
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leads to people trying to impress their friends by doing exclusive activities and
trying show their
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trying to show their
wealth by using unnecessary amounts of money,
for example
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by material possessions. In conclusion, the modern
society
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and technological advances
has resulted
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have resulted
in a change in how we
view
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other people’s worth whereas social status and material possession has become the most dominant factors because it is associated with exclusiveness and luxury. Even though
this
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may seem harmless, it can
also
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further
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reduce the worth of good values,
such
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as loyalty, honour and generosity. If
this
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change in
society
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continues, there is no knowing what values
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are
worth will be based on in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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