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Some people warn that the era of the silver screen is coming to an end and that people will lose interest in going to the cinema

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It is an incontrovertible
facts
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fact
 that
chinema
a medium that disseminates moving pictures
cinema
 has been a popular form of entertainment for many decades.
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, few masses accord that the
cinema
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 world popularity is decreasing day by day and, in future time they will not interested to see movies in theatres. I partially, agree with
this
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 statement and rendered my viewpoints in the upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, people are having some
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 ways to watch movies as
cinema
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 halls like, DVD's and video players. It is gaining more popularity nowadays, because masses
are watch
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have watched
watch
are watching
 the movies in your home with comfortable way with the help of it.
Secondly
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, the cost of films
are
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is
 much cheaper for a big
families
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family
 than going to the
cinema
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 halls.
Moreover
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, people can see new and old movies in their mobile phones in everywhere with free of cost. So,
that is
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 why nowadays people are not giving more preference to
cinema
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 halls.
On the other hand
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, the silver screen
are
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is
 still popular among the
people
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people, although
although
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, there are some
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 ways to watch
moives
a form of entertainment that enacts a story by sound and a sequence of images giving the illusion of continuous movement
movies
. When, the new movie is released, they are keen to watch the movies in
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
. As well as, thriller, horror,
fiction movies
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fiction, movies
 can be enjoyed only on big screens.
In addition
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 to
this
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, theatres
also
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 have been rebuilt into
new multiplex hall
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the new multiplex hall
 with seven or eight screens and they offer
luxious
displaying luxury and furnishing gratification to the senses
luxurious
 facilities in
cinema
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 halls to attract the mobs. In conclusion, the technical advancement
offer
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offers
 them
alot
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a lot
 of new ways to enjoy movies
also
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, it has many benefits. But, people will not stop going Cinemas.

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