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Some people warn that era of the silver screen is coming to an end and that people will lose interest in going to the cinema. Do you agree or diagree with this view.

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It is an incontrovertible fact that
cinema
 has been a popular form of entertainment for many decades.
However
, few masses accord that the big screens popularity is decreasing day by day and, in future time they will not interested to see movies in theatres. I partially, agree with
this
 statement and rendered my viewpoints in the upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, people are having some other ways to watch movies as
cinema
 halls like, DVD's and video players. It is gaining more popularity nowadays, because masses have
watch
Suggestion
watched
 the movies in your home with comfortable way with the help of it.
Secondly
, the cost of films
are
Suggestion
is
 much cheaper for a big family than going to the
cinema
 halls.
Moreover
, people can see new and old movies in their mobile phones in everywhere with free of cost. So,
that is
 why nowadays people are not giving more preference to
cinema
 halls.
On the other hand
, the silver screen is still popular among the people,
although
 there are some other ways to watch pictures. When, the new movie is released, they are keen to watch the movies in
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
. As well as, thriller, horror, fiction, movies can be enjoyed only on big screens.
In addition
 to
this
, theatres
also
 have been rebuilt into
new multiplex hall
Suggestion
the new multiplex hall
 with seven or eight screens and they offer luxurious facilities in
cinema
 halls to attract the mobs. In conclusion, the technical advancement offers them
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of new ways to enjoy movies
also
, it has many benefits. But, people will not stop going Cinemas.
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