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Some people think that studying from the past teaches us nothing about today’s life. Others argue that the history is a value source of information. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There are different opinions about the role of
history
 in our present life. While a lot of people insist that there would be nothing to gain from doing research on what happened in the past, I suppose
history
 does teach us precious lessons. On the one hand, I understand why some people think it is pointless to learn from the past.
First
,
history
 is the field
that is
 rarely used in people’s lives, and
therefore
, they would rather pay attention to science or technology than focus on something that brings no relevant values to the present or future.
Second
, each historical event is interpreted differently based on different facts and perspectives, so there is no guarantee of the accuracy of information obtained. If, in many cases, historical documents were falsified, it would cause tremendous damage to people’s culture and religion.
On the other hand
, I would argue that studying from past events is essential for two principal reasons.
History
 helps young people have thorough insights into their own culture and how their country has evolved.
This
 is particularly true in
case
Suggestion
the case
 of Vietnam. The youth
need
Suggestion
needs
 to understand how their ancestors defended the nation against intruders throughout many dynasties and maintain a sovereign and free country, which would develop their patriotism and pride.
Furthermore
,
history
 depicts the mistakes made in the past,
hence
 helping people to avoid similar ones in the future. In conclusion, acquiring knowledge about historical events,
although
redundant according to
Suggestion
redundant, according to
 some, seems to be of great value to me.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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