You have seen an advertisement in Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • Explain why you would like the job? • Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am Muaj Khan, I am writing in regards with an advert which I saw in Australian Magazin

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morning. I am passionate to do

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work. I would like

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job for two main reasons.

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, I love kids and spending time with them is fun. Let's take my own example, I am actually from

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and extended family background where all our uncle and aunt kinds not only live together

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grow with family values. I have

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experience raising cousins

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all different ages like 2 to 8 years old.

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Aid course. I would be the best suitable person for

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work as I have always understood the needs of children as well as

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I have learned a lot while looking after them. To illustrate, I have been rewarded and appreciated in my current job, which I am doing with an Italian family. I am looking after their two young children aged 5 and 9. Another thing your child will love is my jolly and caring nature, she will enjoy my company. If I get

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job, I would love to visit different places, meet new people, and

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know their culture which I can do in my free time for sure during my time in Australia. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

232 words

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The Greeting

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