You have seen an advertisement in Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • Explain why you would like the job? • Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am Muaj Khan, I am writing in regards with an advert which I saw in Australian Magazin

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morning. I am passionate to do

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work. I would like

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job for two main reasons.

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, I love kids and spending time with them is fun. Let's take my own example, I am actually from

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and extended family background where all our uncle and aunt kinds not only live together

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grow with family values. I have

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experience raising cousins

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all different ages like 2 to 8 years old.

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, I have recently done a

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Aid course. I would be the best suitable person for

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work as I have always understood the needs of children as well as

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I have learned a lot while looking after them. To illustrate, I have been rewarded and appreciated in my current job, which I am doing with an Italian family. I am looking after their two young children aged 5 and 9. Another thing your child will love is my jolly and caring nature, she will enjoy my company. If I get

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job, I would love to visit different places, meet new people, and

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know their culture which I can do in my free time for sure during my time in Australia. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,

naziya.bustaniSat Oct 19 2019

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

232 words

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The Greeting

Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?

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