Some people think that old building are more not important these should be knocked down and other opinion that that these tells about past. Culture so government should allocate money to improve the historical building.

It is irrefutable that historical building
are
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is
most crucial for new generation for gaining
information
.
it
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It
is argued by
few individuals
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a few individuals
that old buildings are not necessary for people and these should be knocked down and other opinion that
they
of them or themselves
their
past
cultures
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cultural
culture
culture's
knowledge is very important for public.
Hence
, management should spend
money
to
development
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develop
develops
the bad conditions of of
historical building
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historical buildings
the historical building
.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am disagree
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disagree
with
this
statement.
which
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Which
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will discuss in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, there
are
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is
some cause of
this
problem. At
firstly
, if, government
allocate
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allocates
money
on historical buildings.
they
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They
can earn more
money
.
because
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Because
, foreigner people come
in
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to
India for gaining
information
about old cultures and customs.
which
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Which
, they can increase
income
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the income
of the nation.
For example
, in 2000 and 2019 millions of individuals visited in golden temple.
which
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Which
,
are earned
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are earning
have earned
earn
more
money
near about 1
corror
someone whose employment involves carrying something
carrier
corridor
carriers
from others nation.
this
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This
place is a source of income.
Moreover
, it is most of younger can get
information
about
thier
of them or themselves
their
countys
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county's
county
history from historical places.
because
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Because
, in arts stream students should have
information
about
thier
of them or themselves
their
culture.
Therefore
, most of historical buildings give
information
to
learns
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learn
during
study
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the study
. On the
second
hand,
some time
at some indefinite or unstated time
sometime
these buildings break down during the bad weather.
that
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That
time these are very
dengrous
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
for people as well as
masess
the common people generally
masses
Masses
messes
have to face many problems related to health.
For instance
, in 2011, most of people wanted to see
taja
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Taja
mehal
the food served and eaten at one time
meal
that time
this
building
condition very
Accept comma addition
condition, very
bad and
this
building break down in
this
year.
thus
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Thus
, 100 of people have to face
problem
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problems
related to death's.
As a result
, authorities should use
money
on
this
types
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type
of buildings. To conclude, according to me,
government
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the government
should utilize
money
on historical buildings.
because
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Because
, they can earn more
money
after
that mangament
Accept comma addition
that, management
that management
can
also
spend earning
money
for like as, medical, accommodation and transport activities as well.
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