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Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming

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In recent times, it can be observed that many advanced nations have created some environmental issues which has a significant effect on the health of the populace. In order to mitigate these problems, the government has some major roles to play by setting a limit on the emission of carbon monoxide and discouraging deforestation.
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 with, setting a limit on the emission of CO2 for production industries by authorities of advanced nation will go a long way to lessen the dangers of global warming. The release of excess CO2 has been a major factor contributed to climate change, which can be detrimental to the health of the population. A recent study by the World Health Organisation (WHO) revealed that residents of major cities in the world
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have
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 to inhalation of CO2 which is a major cause of
leukemia
malignant neoplasm of blood-forming tissues; characterized by abnormal proliferation of leukocytes; one of the four major types of cancer
leukaemia
 and health related diseases.
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, the government should pass a law which
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discourages
 deforestation. Discouraging excessive cutting down of trees will eliminate large amounts of CO2 to be released into the atmosphere,
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 reduce to
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the effects
 of global warming.
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, individuals can play a major role by adopting certain lifestyle changes.
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, switching to energy company that uses solar rather than fossil fuel.
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, lifestyle change
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 as turning off electricity and planting trees in the garden will go along way to reduce the hazards of global warming. In conclusion, to lessen the harmful effects of global warming. Collective effects
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of
 the government and individuals
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 as setting a limit on the emission of CO2 by manufacturing industries and adopting certain lifestyle changes by individuals respectively will go a long way
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