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It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. Do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There have been discussions recently whether the government should use large sums of money to maintain old buildings of the past. Many people claim that
this
 is an important task and the expenses shouldn’t matter. In
this
 essay, I will give you my opinion and why I agree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, it costs
tremendous amount
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a tremendous amount
 of resources to maintain ancient and old buildings. Even though, it might seem inefficient
economically
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economical
 to invest in the restoration and maintenance of these historical buildings, they have a lot of value for the culture.
For instance
, the Greeks are proud of their culture and they have a great interest in showing it through the historical buildings like the
acropolis
the citadel in ancient Greek towns
Acropolis
. These ancient structures give the people of Greece a common identity and a feeling of fellowship.
Furthermore
, surveys have shown that countries that have maintained many buildings of historical value
also
 have a better understanding of their ancestry, which can be a great attribute in the perseverance of their culture.
Additionally
, keeping historical buildings intact can give huge boosts in tourism. Culture and history are two of the most important factors for tourists to choose their destination.
For example
, when Japan opened for foreign visitors to come in and see the temples from the Edo era, tourists swarmed
to
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into
 the country.
Thus
, there can be
economical
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economic
 advantages in using money to protect old buildings of the past. In conclusion, I believe that the maintenance of
historical building
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historical buildings
the historical building
 is important for cultural and historical identity, as well as it can have positive effects on the economy. I like horses.
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