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Band 8.5

A cafe near your home puts some chairs and tables on the pavement for customers. This creates a problem for you. Write a letter to the cafe manager to complain about this matter. In your letter describe the problem; explain how it affects you; say what you will do if this matter is not resolved.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am Jacob, a resident of house no. 23 at Brisk Street. I am writing
this
 letter to raise my concern apropos the removal of chairs and tables from the pavement, which are placed by your B-mega cafe. Since your cafe has covered almost all the walking area, there is no place for people to cross these.
In addition
 to it, in the evenings customers start gazing and sometimes use abusive words if anyone walks through them. Honestly,
this
 illegal covering is affecting me a lot as my father's left leg got injured so badly.
Moreover
, I have to take the backstreet long path to leave my child at school. All these are causing me financial and mental stress. It is requested you please remove all the chairs from the prescribed pavement area at the earliest. A quick removal will be highly appreciable and in case of ignorance, a legal discourse will be followed against you. I hope you will understand my genuine concern regarding it and try to resolve it as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Jacob Brown
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coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. To elevate the clarity, consider breaking down long sentences to avoid potential confusion.
task achievement
The argument is logically presented. However, explaining more on how often the problem occurs or citing specific instances could add weight to your complaint.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task, clearly describing the problem, its effect on you, and what you will do if not resolved.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is formal and appropriate for a complaint, maintaining politeness while being assertive.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are organized, each focusing on a single main idea, enhancing readability and coherence.
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