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Today more and more people are using mobile phone and computer. Thus, the communication ability is losing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People are more dependent on
technology
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 these days. With
technology
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, people become less diligent and prefer to do something in
short and simple way
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a short and simple way
;
communication
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for example
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. I agree that people will lose their ability to communicate with others
face
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 to
face
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 because the
raise
a growth in strength or number or importance
rise
 of
technology
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such
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 as computers and mobile phones.
This
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 will make people do more writing than speaking,
thus
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 their
communication
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 skill
are sinking
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is sinking
. People who communicate through text and chat messenger on computers and mobile phones are used to do more writing rather than speaking. So that when they have a
face
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 to
face
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 conversation with someone, they will have difficulty
on
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in
 expressing their
idea
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ideas
 directly because as we write, we can fix our sentence by
add
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adding
 some suitable words or delete inappropriate words. While speaking is more spontaneous, we cannot change the words that we spoke.
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, people
are prefer
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are preferring
prefer
are preferred
 to communicate with someone virtually because sometimes the people that we want to communicate with in person are not as friendly as they are in virtual chatting so when those two people meet, they will have an awkward moment. On
contrary
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the contrary
,
technology
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 makes people get closer easily because we can still keep in touch with someone who live far miles away. With computers and mobile phones, we can communicate with people from different cultures and increase our
communication
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 skill by having
conversation
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a conversation
conversations
 with them either through texting or video chatting. In conclusion, I believe with more people communicating virtually using
communication
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 devices will endanger their ability to communicate with others
face
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 to
face
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. Because it
will makes
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will make
 people not used to express their
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ideas
 spontaneously and correctly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Global connections
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Communication skills
  • Digital divide
  • Social networks
  • Virtual communication
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Cognitive empathy
  • Digital literacy
  • Social isolation
  • Cyber communication
  • Non-verbal cues
  • Screen time
  • Digital detox
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